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forehead pressed against
a cold window
my breath creating a fog
until it gets so misty
that my eyes start to feel lost

forehead pressed against
a cold window
creating my own fog
I pull back
and scribble words on it
on the picturesque light frost

it looks beautiful
my reflection
showing against the words I write
my scribbled memories
I keep writing on the mist
about the world
about wrong and about right

I write my life out in a song
my fingers feel cool and moist
I finish up and I pull back
to see the fog that gave me a voice

to see my master creation
to see that the edges are already gone
to see that its starting to fade
edges getting wetter
as I stare at it - withdrawn

my creationis already dispelling
around the edges
fading seemingly fast
all I can do
is sit and stare
and wonder how long this can last

I keep reading whatever is left
my words escaping seemingly slow
barely noticeable how much it's faded
until I can't make out my words any more
can't make out my words any more
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~GreenDay013:iconGreenDay013: Nov 11, 2006, 12:06:44 PM
you did really good on this peom.. i really do love

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~patronus4000:iconpatronus4000: Nov 11, 2006, 7:05:32 PM
Aww, that's a nice poem.

Reminds me of how I draw and write and write stuff on the mirror after a shower. ^^ I draw a lot of random stuff and make designs, so when I come out, my mom's like, "How do you make those patterns?!" ^^;

I think this poem might belong in Human Nature. Maybe.

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~xxx-fancy-xxx:iconxxx-fancy-xxx: Nov 12, 2006, 8:22:09 AM
Thank You <3 ^_^

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~xxx-fancy-xxx:iconxxx-fancy-xxx: Nov 12, 2006, 8:39:57 AM
Hmmm. Human Nature? Yeah, I was gonna put it there but then I thought...I don't know what I thought. o_o Shrug.

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Mood: Love ~The-art-a-bella:iconThe-art-a-bella: Nov 12, 2006, 1:08:33 PM
aww sadia i love how u've related the fading away of words on foggy windows to how memories slowly fade away and after some time u don;t even remeber the words u once spoke or heard ...lovvveee the poemm <3333333

*zahra decalres publicily that sadia is better than cecelia ahern* =D

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~patronus4000:iconpatronus4000: Nov 12, 2006, 7:11:42 PM
YAAAYYYY!!! Cecilia Ahern's goin' down!! XP

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~The-art-a-bella:iconThe-art-a-bella: Nov 12, 2006, 7:31:03 PM
hahah yepp she is i guess.... *pssstt cecelia, blame sadia for ur downfall, it's all her fault*

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*If tommorow doesn't come, i at least want to live today to it's fullest*
~patronus4000:iconpatronus4000: Nov 12, 2006, 7:57:45 PM
(Psst, Cecelia. You should blame Zahra. She publicly declared your downfall first.)

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~xxx-fancy-xxx:iconxxx-fancy-xxx: Nov 14, 2006, 4:51:16 PM

loool. better than cecelia aherrnn? hah. XD [fails the attempt to think up witty remark]

Ooooo. You analyzed it. The poem. I just left it up to the reader to interpret what the message of this piece is cause I think it can mean several different things and blah blah blah blah :blah:. ^^; heh. Anyway. Thank You zahrhrarhahra. = )


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~xxx-fancy-xxx:iconxxx-fancy-xxx: Nov 14, 2006, 4:51:29 PM
I agree. ^
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